As is vividly betrayed in the drawing above, a newly-married couple are hugging each other happily and their parents are holding a huge amount of debt hardly. In addition, there is one sentence “ Establish their own happiness on the basis of parents hardship”, which lighlightsthat nowadays many young penple are seeking for their own happiness despite their parents’ feeling. So what causes this phenomenon?From my point of view, there are mainly two reasons. First, with the promotion of “Family planning”, many families have one child only, which makes the child so spoilt that they are used to the high quality life. Second, many children has the psychology of comparison, which makes them have the wish to hold a luxurious wedding ceremony.In order to solve this problem, children should develop the virtue of thrifty. As marriage is a lifetime matter, it will not be changed because of their wedding ceremony is luxurious or not. So they should refuse luxurious wedding ceremony. Futhermore, parents should not spoil their children by satisfy their all demands. I think under the joint effort of parents and children, the ethos of keeping up with the joneses will be decreased significantly
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